April 20, 2011


PAD Challenge, Prompt #20: write a 'message in a bottle' poem
I needed to have a different take on this prompt than how everyone else responded to it - and ended up spending most of the day before inspiration hit. I remembered the verse in the Psalms, where the psalmist declares that God had "kept count of my tossings; put my tears in your bottle. Are they not in your book?" (Psalm 56:8).

sorrows overflow
drown my eyes
break before you

remorse, regret
trickle away
baptize your book

griefs boil over
rise like the tide
overflow your bottle


  1. The middle of this slightly outshines either end...but only slightly, as the whole thing's luminous. Well done.

  2. Comes around full circle in a very subtle way.

  3. I like the way this goes round in circles. Comforting.

  4. I really enjoy the wording in this. Such great descriptions in few word. I can see the tears that would "Baptise your book" and "sorrows overflow, drown my eyes". Beautifully written though very sad.

  5. Sounds like the narrator's drowning, I hope she can float!

    Well expressed thoughts!

  6. Thank you all for your kind words!

  7. What a fascinating take on a message in a bottle - and I love all the tear/water imagery.